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Changes place of coffee producer.
Coffee productions have increased 30% .
The high demand European countires and america has made Vietnam the 2nd highest coffee producer.
Columbia has been impacted coffee productions.
Also, people's drinking habit chaged.

 

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The topic of this lecture was about changes place of coffee producer.
According to the speaker that coffee production have increased to 30% This is because of high

damand European countires and America has made Vietnam the 2nd highest coffee producer.
For this reason, Columbia has been impacted thier coffee prodcutions. In addition to this, people's drinking habit also changed.


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11 beautifulday 2017.06.18 21:29
제가 듣기로는,SST에서는 템플렛안쓰는게 좋다고 들었어요. 밑에 쓰신거는  리텔렉쳐때 쓰는 템플렛같아요. 저도 고수가 아니고 초짜라서 말은 설득력없으나, SST에서는 템플렛빼고 하는게 점수높다고 들었어요
4 님하같이가 2017.06.19 18:05
그래도 듣고 요약 잘안되면 템플릿 써서 하는게 낫지않을까요?